The Summoning

Here is my entry to this week’s Friday Fictioneers.  The idea is to write a piece of flash fiction (in this case, a piece of approximately 100 words) prompted/inspired by the following image:

The original image, along with a full explanation of the Friday Fictioneers concept, can be found at:

http://madisonwoods.wordpress.com/2012/02/15/photo-prompt-for-100-word-flash-fridayfictioneers-18/

So here’s the story; as always I appreciate any thoughts, comments and ideas for improvement.  Enjoy!

The Summoning

Their ritual complete, the three students waited by the ancient stone, anxious to subjugate their promised elemental.  Behind them, the night unfurled and a shadowed and noxious thing coalesced into being.  He fell upon them with a grim silence, rending and eviscerating until only a fine blood mist remained.
As sanguine Rorschach blots formed on the rock,  a second, more mundane shadow shuffled among the mulch and decay of the forest.
“The Blood Lichen is seeded once again, my Lord.  Why do you desire it so?”
The query was met with a dry chuckle, not unlike the sound of dead leaves crumbling.
“Because, my dear Faestus, without it my soups would be terribly bland.”

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37 comments on “The Summoning

  1. elmowrites says:

    ooh, the sound of dead leaves crumbling, so evocative! Nice job, Andy!

  2. susielindau says:

    This is the best!! What a great ending. Bravo!
    The description you used and word choice was superb…

  3. Quill Shiv says:

    LOL Bland soup. Man, a demon after my own heart. “What do you desire?” “Good coffee!” “Um…really?” “Yup. That’ll be all.”

    Great job!

    The link to my drabble is here: http://quillshiv.wordpress.com/2012/02/17/reading-tree-leaves/

  4. parul says:

    This is very good! Love the choice of words and the title of the story and the dialogue between the characters! Dark and mystical! Very good!

    Here’s mine – http://faitaccompli.wordpress.com/2012/02/17/moments-gone-and-past/

  5. Hi Andy,
    Wow, this in anything but bland. Loved that you flexed your vocabulary and combined horror with humor in such a seamless manner.
    Here’s mine: bridgesareforburning.wordpress.com/

  6. teschoenborn says:

    Horror and humor, I love it! When a writer can pull it off, it’s wonderful, and you were successful here.

    Here’s mine: http://teschoenborn.com/

  7. miq says:

    This was such a good read! I liked it up until the last line, then I loved it! Thank you for sharing.

    Here’s mine.
    http://threedescriptors.wordpress.com/2012/02/17/flash-fiction-6/

  8. Siobhan Muir says:

    My favorite line: “sanguine Rorschach blots formed on the rock”. Great story and so evocative, Andy. 🙂

  9. The Lime says:

    Ooweee that’s creepy. I agree about the horror humor balance — very finely tuned. Excellent work.

    Mine’s here: http://thecolorlime.wordpress.com/2012/02/17/imaginary-friend/

  10. Madison Woods says:

    I wish I could identify what it is about that entire passage that has captured my mind right now. Loved the language. Maybe it was the juxtaposition of the students thinking they were in power when the conjured being had used them for soup ingredient seeds…ah, they who thought they were so powerful were at the end so different than they’d conceived themselves. A sudden shift of relativity.

  11. Loved it! Especially the humor in the final sentence–flavoring for soup, nice touch! Mine: http://vsta.pr/zMx9VT.

  12. This story was excellent. I was hooked from the get go. When ..’the night unfurled and a shadowed and noxious thing coalesced into being..’ I was spellbound. And the story grew and evolved deliciously from there. Very tasty on many levels.

    Aloha,

    Doug

    http://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/2012/02/17/ask-ulysses/

  13. Judee says:

    Excellent. The shift of power, the last delicious line. Great writing.

  14. This is gripping! Something morphed into a being and did such horror?! Well, i am thrilled.
    Here is mine: http://seewilliams.wordpress.com/2012/02/17/stuck-the-other-side-of-valour-100words-flash-fiction/

  15. This was terrific. What a dry sense of humor. Excellent.

  16. niiko47 says:

    Your writing is fantastic. There’s a wonderful mixture of dark fantasy, possibly a hint of horror, and some twisted humour.
    I love how the students, be they present day or from some fantastical world, are basically powerless and totally out of their depth. Their fate is at once gruesome and almost deserved, having messed with powers way beyond their control and understanding.

    Love it.

    • Aww, thanks for your support and very kind feedback, bud. I’m glad you’re along on this flash fiction adventure with me. Take it easy and good luck with the next one! I’m off to read the latest chapter of your book next. *rubs hands in anticipation* 🙂

  17. loustar02 says:

    Fantastic ending – really did make me laugh. Like Niko I thought it was funny that the students didn’t have real life figured out at all. Much like reality?! Great piece.

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